Sadness settles over me
like a fluttering
summerweight blanket.
Tears fall,
streams of salty nectar
fall into the hollows
and the quiet places
where I like to be kissed.
Things that defined me
have fallen away.
Things I once held dear
have retreated.
Things I thought I understood
have become entangled, gnarled in my mind.
People I thought I had figured out
showed me some new, secret part of themselves.
The path I thought I was on
seems to have ended,
or maybe
it has just become so littered with debris
and obstacles
and dried out, dusty dreams
that I think I have wandered too far.
Will the solid light of dawm
show me something new?
Or will the sadness wrap around me,
take hold,
not let go,
not let me go.
The last part annoys me. Thoughts?
By: Heather on June 13, 2008
at 12:04 pm
Yes, kinda. Maybe delete the last stanza.
However, annoyed is good too.
By: Brian on June 13, 2008
at 12:17 pm
Btw, how come you wouldn’t have lunch with me? Is it me? I knew it. I knew my blog wasn’t sexy enough.
By: Brian on June 13, 2008
at 12:18 pm
OK last stanza deleted. Much more angsty this way!
Oh, Brian. I would have lunch with you! If you would promise to ignore me dropping food all over my shirt like I did today!
ARGH!!!
By: Heather on June 13, 2008
at 1:02 pm
dotdotdot
will the dawn show something new – will i shake off my sadness
will i leave it where it falls – and follow- whatever it is – to where ever I am
i love your way of words.
perhaps mixing them up
will work for you -
as your pome asks
questions
to ponder
By: ae on June 13, 2008
at 1:05 pm
Then where do you want to go for lunch?
By: Brian on June 13, 2008
at 2:23 pm
One never knows everything about anyone and change is evergoing.
By: Pure Evyl on June 13, 2008
at 7:30 pm
maybe the path your on has somehow just begun??
By: leigh lear on June 14, 2008
at 9:30 am
ae – Thank you! I am trying to remain positive, but in that moment, I was just reveling in the sadness. Adding it back as a question made more sense!
Brian – Zebra, the alleged French Laundry of Charlotte. Of course, being all haute cuisine and all, I doubt they are open for lunch. The Penguin works for me!
Evyl – Are you telling me, in a nice way, that it’s time to kind of suck it up and deal with it? Because I know you’re right. I just needed a little temper tantrum first!
Leigh – I am definitely on a new path. I just wish I had read the writing on the wall and discovered the new path on my terms instead of someone else’s. In the end, though, it will all be as it should be!
H
By: Heather on June 14, 2008
at 4:59 pm